This week for my 100 WC, the prompt that we had to follow was to write a story with the words Silence, Swam, Orange, Pajamas and Thunder in it.
These words I have highlighted in bold.
I was focusing of writing exactly 100 words this week, and thankfully after a lot of work of squeezing and arranging words, I made that happen!
Have a read and tell me what you think, would you like to do this?
The dull silence was unbearable.
The only sound was the water that swam and sloshed around us.
A ship had been and gone, but never stopped; it just kept moving forward, slowly into the burnt orange sunset.
We sat adrift, dad was trying to keep the mood positive, but we all could hear the quiver and shaking behind his calming words.
Mum sent us to bed.
I changed into my pajamas, and while I was lying there, I could hear the faint sound of thunder quaking in the distance.
I pulled the covers over my head, wishing it never began.
Nikita I really enjoyed reading your story, and I like how you never really come right out and explain the aspect of the family being lost at sea. That vagueness adds to the suspense and is a very good writing technique; allowing the reader to imagine the story in their own way. And your use of some really great adverbs helps to set the mood of tenseness and fear, despite trying to stay positive. Really great work, and I am nominating this piece for the showcase.
ReplyDeletenice work
ReplyDeleteI love this writing Nikita. I am impressed with the way you have deftly woven in the required words while retaining a sense of mystery and reality simultaneously. Your 'burnt orange sunset' reminds me of a song by John Hiatt which contains the description 'lipstick sunset.'
ReplyDeleteI look forward to your next 100 word challenge.
Hi Nikita, well done on managing to do the 100 word challenge. I hope you had fun and I would love to do this challenge.
ReplyDeleteKind regards Damon.